Hello! I'm back, and I am going to write the next chapter of my book, hope you like it!
Ashleys diary
chapter 2
I was soooooo scared! My dad was trying to get me back, but I was too scared to move! Then, the ice caved in and I fell. The water was freezing! I hated it!All I remember from then was my dad yelling, my out stretched hand that no one could reach and my whole body going numb, then nothing.
Next thing I knew, I had woken up in the hospital, a nurse standing by my bed talking with my dad and my best friend Amethyst with her parents. Then I saw someone walking up to my room from out the window, it was my mum! I thought she had died, but when she came in she told me every thing! Turns out she had just fainted, then got amnesia, then we moved and she had been looking for me and dad for 14 years (i'm 15). So when she heard that I had fell into a frozen pond (or was frozen) she came right here to see me. I was sooooooooooooo happy, but she still has a lot of explaining to do!
Then she said,"me and Dan (my dad) are still legally married, so, what do you say I come and be your mother, like, your looking after you again mother, yes?" OF COURSE! I said! I would love that!
So, did you like that? I sure did! Pop back in soon to see the third chapter! (if there is one!)
Niamh🦄
hi Niamh,
ReplyDeleteOMG luckly her mum is still alive! I can't wait till the next chapter! your books are soooooo cool!keep writting please!
blog you later,
Lila
(I remebered to write blog you later Lila this time if you look at your last chapter I forgot to and had to replay to myself)
Kia Ora Lila. Thanks for your comment. A challenge that I faced when completing this task was thinking of where to put the paragraphs.
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Blog you later,
Niamh🐢
Hi Niamh, what fabulous twists and turns in your plot! Thank goodness you were rescued from the frozen water. I'm really looking forward to see how your story develops. Did you know Franny is writing a blog story too? You can check it out here:
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Kia Ora Megan. Thanks for your comment. A challenge that I faced when completing this task was thinking of what setting would fit with the story.
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Niamh.
Well I wasn't expecting that twist! I really like the way the sentence ended with 'then nothing'. I think it interesting how an author (you) can use just two words and it can have such impact.
ReplyDeleteKia Ora Mrs Haines. Thanks for your comment. A challenge that I faced when completing this task was thinking of names and who was who.
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Blog you later,
Niamh
Gosh you certainly have some interesting ideas in your story, very clever thinking!! I like your use of punctuation, especially speech marks and commas. I think that you really enjoy writing Niamh....am I right?
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